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The wick holds the flame
But fire's heart can't touch it
A lonely pairing

Blazing fire crackles
Making light and shadow dance
To defy darkness
I like fires. They have a magical and mysterious quality all their own. If you look closely at a candle, you'll notice a space between the wick and the flame. They need each other, yet they remain aloof. Fascinating!
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BrokenAngel363 Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

While these are interesting you're off.... Haiku are 5 syllables 7 syllables 5.....

 

The wick holds the flame -5 syllables
But fire's heart does not touch it -8 syllables
A lonely pairing -5 syllables

Blazing fire crackles -6 syllables
Making light and shadow dance -7 syllables
To defy the darkness -6 syllables

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ravynkatt Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I am indeed. Sometimes when I write them down I forget hos I originally planned them and end up with extra syllables. :) I will fix it. ;) Although "bla-zing fire crack-les" seems to have 5??
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BrokenAngel363 Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
If you sound it out fire has 2 syllables.
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ravynkatt Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I checked and be used as a one or a two syllable word. :) We are both correct! :)
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BrokenAngel363 Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay. I've just always known it as two. Still good poems though. Don't think I'm hating on them or anything.
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ravynkatt Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't! I appreciate you checking, and I had to google it myself to make sure. ;) It can have one OR two, which makes it an extra good haiku word. :)
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BrokenAngel363 Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol oh btw, thanks for the llama and the watch :3
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ravynkatt Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hehe, no problem. :)
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ravynkatt Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Eh. I would say it could either way. I imagine letting it out of one's mouth in a quick snap instead of taking one's time. :)
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simply beautiful. And I feel the same way, but about everything! I tend to get quite philosophical at times ^^
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